tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post8504075462123630450..comments2024-02-17T08:14:14.308-06:00Comments on imaginary garden with real toads: Herotomost ~ Corey Rowley's ChallengeSherry Blue Skyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01926508656571639801noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-51733404489504313762012-03-21T18:36:22.520-05:002012-03-21T18:36:22.520-05:00Rain is an excellent choice for a challenge, and t...Rain is an excellent choice for a challenge, and the response was really good, as expected from herotomost. Sorry it has taken me so long to come and comment.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-30731983194974615882012-03-21T08:33:29.255-05:002012-03-21T08:33:29.255-05:00very very nice... my favorite line is "your m...very very nice... my favorite line is "your mistake toweling my body dry with misplaced kindness." whoosh.Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-79401507048205722492012-03-20T20:55:10.164-05:002012-03-20T20:55:10.164-05:00Again.... Thanks so much for all the wonderful com...Again.... Thanks so much for all the wonderful comments...you all rock.....and not just a little.Herotomosthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11486093602914824276noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-91335252000849971632012-03-20T20:12:51.662-05:002012-03-20T20:12:51.662-05:00This is wonderful. It is my first time here. I cam...This is wonderful. It is my first time here. I came by way of a comment that Susie made on my blog and I am glad that I did. Great stuff here. The whole damn world is filled with such good stuff~Terihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13046623774704584939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-26284483585777665172012-03-20T18:17:59.606-05:002012-03-20T18:17:59.606-05:00but was there ever any doubt you wouldn't rise...but was there ever any doubt you wouldn't rise to the challenge? bravo Corey - you took the prompt and ran with it in a way I wasn't expecting! nicely done of course - many brilliant lines here! love the "dears" - they're always quite strong I find!Ostensible Truthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08775793995809226782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-33313961761565181992012-03-20T17:21:29.501-05:002012-03-20T17:21:29.501-05:00I enjoyed the raining for five days straight, the ...I enjoyed the raining for five days straight, the ways in which you captured the emotions, and the great ending...the refrains...all of it.Carol Steel https://www.blogger.com/profile/01331628292567383426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-61026486048390986552012-03-20T17:10:00.565-05:002012-03-20T17:10:00.565-05:00Excellent write! Really enjoyed this.Excellent write! Really enjoyed this.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-32700006617976856282012-03-20T16:23:10.362-05:002012-03-20T16:23:10.362-05:00Corey, beautiful writing...I specially like the ra...Corey, beautiful writing...I specially like the raining for five straight days...the refraining lines...leaving and begging to come back ~ <br /><br />Great post to both you and Susie ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-39989412644833548022012-03-20T16:20:01.582-05:002012-03-20T16:20:01.582-05:00Thanks for the great comments everyone...you have ...Thanks for the great comments everyone...you have mad my day....many times over!!!Herotomosthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11486093602914824276noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-78629540687724704262012-03-20T11:59:13.690-05:002012-03-20T11:59:13.690-05:00Wonderful! Love the rain and its many moods, love ...Wonderful! Love the rain and its many moods, love this poem.De Jacksonhttp://whimsygizmo.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-21597237105417600422012-03-20T11:33:58.771-05:002012-03-20T11:33:58.771-05:00Bravo Corey! I loved all the elements that you pro...Bravo Corey! I loved all the elements that you projected...you know I was listening to the song, "Set Fire to the Rain" by Adele before I read your poem~ Wow!<br />I think yours would make a better song~ :D<br />I agree beautifully composed!Ellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06070952447277684613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-74218364213717663962012-03-20T11:14:34.778-05:002012-03-20T11:14:34.778-05:00well done, Corey - I like the metaphor very much (...well done, Corey - I like the metaphor very much (especially the raining judgments part), and the 5-day-rain first lines and refrains, repeated but cleverly varied - altogether just a perfect format for this rain themeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-66741190585174155302012-03-20T11:07:10.532-05:002012-03-20T11:07:10.532-05:00Corey, this piece took rain to a place I didn'...Corey, this piece took rain to a place I didn't expect, but I am so moved by it. Again thank you so much for taking my simple suggestion of rain and turning it into deeply emotional artistry.Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-86474908380263839662012-03-20T10:40:25.281-05:002012-03-20T10:40:25.281-05:00Hey, what's everyone trashing on us "mous...Hey, what's everyone trashing on us "mouse women" for? I, lolamouse, am a proud mouse of a woman!<br /><br />That aside, I loved this poem! It's been raining here for a few days, so the mood was perfect. I loved the juxtaposition of the childlike song-sing verses with the heart wrenching alternate verses. Beautifully composed!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-30338133007208233232012-03-20T10:23:35.717-05:002012-03-20T10:23:35.717-05:00A perfect format --- insistent and painful, just l...A perfect format --- insistent and painful, just like five days of rain! Beautifully composed. I am impressed.Mary Ann Potterhttp://www.fromthestarcatcher.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-43930587843249507322012-03-20T10:13:40.286-05:002012-03-20T10:13:40.286-05:00Argh. Blogger ate my comment. This was such a rich...Argh. Blogger ate my comment. This was such a rich read - love the repetition, love the progression of the tale - and the character's emotions - love the having no weapons, then the restocked armory. I especially liked the well wishes at the end - he took the hero's path!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-18180844511889591032012-03-20T09:36:16.551-05:002012-03-20T09:36:16.551-05:00I can only add my hurrahs, Corey. I have been a lo...I can only add my hurrahs, Corey. I have been a long admirer of your unique style, and ability to read the human genome, without prejudice or pardon.<br /><br />This is stunning: the journey through heartache through to redemption is grand. It takes a lot out of one to be rejected, and it is painstakingly difficult to regain the sense of self you describe at the end.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-60183221542820070702012-03-20T09:27:10.903-05:002012-03-20T09:27:10.903-05:00Your opening stanza especially is a level of poetr...Your opening stanza especially is a level of poetry all on its own. It knocked my jaw down. These words in particular:<br /><br />"Your judgments rained steadily upon me, five days straight"<br /><br />"That one drop on the tip of my tongue, cruel in every detail, spread like acid"<br /><br />"You grew into a giant of a woman that day and I had no suitable weapons"<br /><br />Thank you so much for taking up the challenge; phenomenal work.<br /><br />~Shawna<br />rosemarymint.wordpress.comAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-76199698809993988512012-03-20T09:19:25.085-05:002012-03-20T09:19:25.085-05:00The refrains are wonderful and the last stanza had...The refrains are wonderful and the last stanza had me cheering for the man! Very sad, yes, but his new found sense of self worth was nice. Thank you for a very enjoyable read! The parting line is sweet - sorrowful and forgiving, not bitter.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-22530548304856303282012-03-20T05:57:27.069-05:002012-03-20T05:57:27.069-05:00Very rich response to the challenge of 'rain.&...Very rich response to the challenge of 'rain.' The repeating 'dears' strengthened the poem's message, and I loved this: "You receded into a mouse of a woman that day and I had a restocked armory." Oh yes!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-76658483604625352612012-03-20T02:18:09.621-05:002012-03-20T02:18:09.621-05:00Love this, the formulaic stanza intros and refrain...Love this, the formulaic stanza intros and refrains, the cutting similes, and the sheer exuberance of language--the spiraling track of love gone bad eventually melting in the rain--loved the image of the soul running down the storm drain to the sea...and the final touch of sun seals the deal. Excellent writing, Corey.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-11670394420732743962012-03-20T00:31:08.817-05:002012-03-20T00:31:08.817-05:00Fantastic response, Rowley! Your aesthetic has n...Fantastic response, Rowley! Your aesthetic has never been more sharp and shining!Isadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-64897401916273124222012-03-20T00:25:01.746-05:002012-03-20T00:25:01.746-05:00So much in five days, so much emotion, so much pai...So much in five days, so much emotion, so much pain, so much rain.<br />Well done, Corey, very well done.<br />KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.com