tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post8857423660589948425..comments2024-02-17T08:14:14.308-06:00Comments on imaginary garden with real toads: In Tandem with Margaret Bednar & Gillena CoxSherry Blue Skyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01926508656571639801noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-19590083791596062992017-09-01T17:21:36.606-05:002017-09-01T17:21:36.606-05:00Jasmine is one of my favorite scent. It is so evoc...Jasmine is one of my favorite scent. It is so evocative of night time and dreaming.Rommyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18343895193475984183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-76714924321265159042017-08-07T08:50:47.072-05:002017-08-07T08:50:47.072-05:00Declaring a poem "dream-like" doesn'...Declaring a poem "dream-like" doesn't exempt it from standards of any kind. (And don't even get me started on "poetic license" which usually is thrown out there to justify all types of bad writing.)<br /><br />No matter what the theme, unless it is some kind of experimental word salad, unity of effect still applies. If you want to write the literary equivalent of "Dumbo", Paul, that's fine but bear in mind it's geared for 5 year olds. Here's a link that deals with what I'm talking about; it concerns short fiction but applies also to poetry.<br /><br />https://www.enotes.com/homework-help/what-does-poe-mean-by-his-attempt-achieve-unity-470054<br /><br />Nobody wants to hear this here, I get that. But as long as I'm a Toad, I'm not going to call rhinestones diamonds. (And this also means that if I say I love what you've written, I really mean that, too.)Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-55823828694765185432017-08-07T01:26:48.893-05:002017-08-07T01:26:48.893-05:00definitely dreamlike, and since when do dreams mim...definitely dreamlike, and since when do dreams mimic the real world? so elephants can leap...<br /><br />I always admire the rhythm and pace of well-turned form ~grapelinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14929030339206629628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-23037033208736005992017-08-06T22:09:44.525-05:002017-08-06T22:09:44.525-05:00Quite surreal and dreamlike... almost as if everyt...Quite surreal and dreamlike... almost as if everything is being created as we read them...Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-20518044535366338732017-08-05T21:19:54.622-05:002017-08-05T21:19:54.622-05:00I stand amazed that everyone has flung themselves ...I stand amazed that everyone has flung themselves thus far into some sort of form<br />Poetry. Angiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11413074557542736813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-21092221009256482812017-08-05T12:46:09.084-05:002017-08-05T12:46:09.084-05:00Thanks for Your appreciation readers.
Much love.....Thanks for Your appreciation readers.<br /><br />Much love... <br /><br />Gillena Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09830061733849775594noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-67757949980841114182017-08-05T05:24:27.867-05:002017-08-05T05:24:27.867-05:00https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E2d4bj592ighttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E2d4bj592igAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-35437294033292716922017-08-05T05:22:37.959-05:002017-08-05T05:22:37.959-05:00Dreamlike scenario plays out in this piece. Intere...Dreamlike scenario plays out in this piece. Interesting form. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-88891219628419042342017-08-03T13:18:02.883-05:002017-08-03T13:18:02.883-05:00Wow, this is wonderful, so fluid! I just read it a...Wow, this is wonderful, so fluid! I just read it aloud and it really sings. Well done!Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-14374939975543443502017-08-03T12:17:51.649-05:002017-08-03T12:17:51.649-05:00I couldn't get past the leaping elephants--sin...I couldn't get past the leaping elephants--since they can't jump. You've got African or Asian creatures together with American (cougars) and tropical banana leaves. I realize it's a fanciful representation of light crossing the sky from morning to evening, so perhaps your elephants are meant to be doing something they can't do, but it doesn't fly for me. There's so many different references in a short poem, and all of it couched in high-flung language; it's busy but unfocused. Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-53213407238928175052017-08-02T21:54:36.372-05:002017-08-02T21:54:36.372-05:00Thank you everyone! What I am constantly amazed w...Thank you everyone! What I am constantly amazed with is that I will approach a challenge and think "I can't do this"... and then somehow it is better than I expected. Thank you, Gillena for the vision and collaboration! Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-85973967794124235962017-08-02T17:44:59.200-05:002017-08-02T17:44:59.200-05:00Marvelously done. Thank you Margaret and Gillena....Marvelously done. Thank you Margaret and Gillena.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-10001999016819142252017-08-02T15:36:19.400-05:002017-08-02T15:36:19.400-05:00Beautiful work! I so enjoyed learning about the c...Beautiful work! I so enjoyed learning about the creative process behind this poem. Seamless work and a joy to read.tonispencerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04200564195675794747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-51972635174390845922017-08-02T15:21:01.622-05:002017-08-02T15:21:01.622-05:00This is beautiful!! Great jobThis is beautiful!! Great jobSusie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-12510460312068970232017-08-02T13:29:23.075-05:002017-08-02T13:29:23.075-05:00I love these in tandem poems. This one is a deligh...I love these in tandem poems. This one is a delight. I love the rhyme scheme, so well executed, and the lush descriptions..........I especially love the opening stanza with its unexpectedly leaping elephants! This poem was a pleasure to read!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-45103685164302018352017-08-02T12:48:03.753-05:002017-08-02T12:48:03.753-05:00What a fine piece of poetry this is to read.What a fine piece of poetry this is to read.Julianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16781106976505685053noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-70020201032401760132017-08-02T12:06:42.827-05:002017-08-02T12:06:42.827-05:00When I first read the explanation of how you colla...When I first read the explanation of how you collaborated and saw the words 'interlocking rubaiyat', I immediately thought of the Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam and 'tricky'. But on looking closer at the form, because it consists of quatrains, it's perfect for collaboration, and you've made a wonderful job of it, too. There's movement, gorgeous language, and it flows so well.<br /><br /><br /><br />Kim M. Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668459794787447606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-60702128609075640162017-08-02T10:02:04.958-05:002017-08-02T10:02:04.958-05:00This is absolutely gorgeous!💖 The poem has a time...This is absolutely gorgeous!💖 The poem has a timeless quality to it that lures the reader in and leaves a lasting impact. It was difficult to tell which poet wrote which stanza as your voices blend together so seamlessly! Beautifully done, Margaret and Gillena!💖Sanaa Rizvihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06681404650477409830noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-80126281915910476752017-08-02T09:31:48.225-05:002017-08-02T09:31:48.225-05:00What a sublime poem! The form is the perfect means...What a sublime poem! The form is the perfect means to bring together two voices. Your individual love of nature resounds in each stanza and the whole paints such a pretty picture. The read was a great pleasure. So interesting, also, to hear of the process.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-51906654924655572712017-08-02T07:32:44.528-05:002017-08-02T07:32:44.528-05:00This incredible. I love this so much.This incredible. I love this so much.✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-58712505673118344742017-08-02T00:17:30.200-05:002017-08-02T00:17:30.200-05:00Looks like a fun write, Guys. I'm on the road ...Looks like a fun write, Guys. I'm on the road still but may work one up soon. Thank you much. <br />..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.com