tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post7435749718488753458..comments2024-02-17T08:14:14.308-06:00Comments on imaginary garden with real toads: Personal Challenge: Love, Death And CarnivalsSherry Blue Skyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01926508656571639801noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-16583887338975065232014-09-28T15:40:28.934-05:002014-09-28T15:40:28.934-05:00Wow.. I missed Reading this earlier.. like a broad...Wow.. I missed Reading this earlier.. like a broadside murder-ballad.. Lot of such poetry, and I can imagine Nick Cave singing this.. would have made perfect sense...brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-90768701683321157762014-09-28T00:55:42.286-05:002014-09-28T00:55:42.286-05:00damn. :) ~damn. :) ~Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-88678962158501591862014-09-24T11:28:24.164-05:002014-09-24T11:28:24.164-05:00Epic write! Immensely enjoyable. ~~ I find the ...Epic write! Immensely enjoyable. ~~ I find the entire carnival milieu fascinating. HBO's "Carnivale" lasted two seasons and I would have, could have watched forever. Your piece brings to mind the darkness of the series, the characters, the darkness, the desolate feel of that landscape. ~~<br />This was a gift .. thank you! Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-35476024726896446892014-09-24T05:47:17.814-05:002014-09-24T05:47:17.814-05:00Joy, this is just over the top. the big top, hah! ...Joy, this is just over the top. the big top, hah! it's clever and fantastical and well-strung. love it. i can't remember that form, either... running off to look it up.Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-53267349465984925662014-09-24T05:16:10.392-05:002014-09-24T05:16:10.392-05:00You filled in the blanks shiveringly well. Love th...You filled in the blanks shiveringly well. Love this tale.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-76106619558135468062014-09-23T22:04:58.813-05:002014-09-23T22:04:58.813-05:00Sorry about the "Katie, the schoolteacher.&qu...Sorry about the "Katie, the schoolteacher." You told us, I missed it (how could I, it was there in plain sight--I found it over at your site, I read better from verse and line format).<br />..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-69080005711322410722014-09-23T21:56:03.222-05:002014-09-23T21:56:03.222-05:00This is a delightful little read, Hedge. The firs...This is a delightful little read, Hedge. The first time through was a bit hard because of all the characters. Most were background setting props to add action and personality to the story.<br /><br />Second time plus it read nicely because I knew the characters. I don't think you told that Katie was a teacher although we could surmise that at the end in your wrap-up. It didn't bother me that you had a July rain in September, that happens. Though I did pause there for a minute.<br /><br />The "<i>a cheap White Owl blunt</i>" line I could identify with because smoking a White Owl blunt and drinking a 42 is on my bucket list. At my age that might kill me, so be it. I was born too early, I missed all the good stuff in young life. :)<br />..<br />Could I possibly have been Daddy Jim from Texas? It was a short part but I'll take it.<br />..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-47243576517626192014-09-23T20:54:18.509-05:002014-09-23T20:54:18.509-05:00I love this! Your story telling is amazing...I was...I love this! Your story telling is amazing...I was taken in from the first sentence. Love the process notes...what a sad, creepy reality. Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-40755115673093052912014-09-23T16:51:19.489-05:002014-09-23T16:51:19.489-05:00I was riveted to the story, imagery and fast paced...I was riveted to the story, imagery and fast paced unfolding of adventure to death ~ I can't pick a favorite part but will reread and marvel at the beautiful verses ~ Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-22786122536812181952014-09-23T16:40:03.158-05:002014-09-23T16:40:03.158-05:00You have outdone yourself. The language is beyond ...You have outdone yourself. The language is beyond glorious, the story spooky and as real as dust kicked up by wagon wheels. Thank you so much for the shout out, but I had nothing to do with the creation of this wonder. "Wowww" is all I can say. I will be back to read this again and again.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-58554709143987028132014-09-23T16:29:41.151-05:002014-09-23T16:29:41.151-05:00Thanks everyone. I'm truly grateful for your i...Thanks everyone. I'm truly grateful for your input, and glad you were drawn into this tale, which now is just something that is mostly told by college kids to scare themselves when they go out to the bridge to party--but which was the sum total of those two young women's lives. Thanks for taking the time to read this long autumnal story.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-18341641707097518082014-09-23T13:27:08.998-05:002014-09-23T13:27:08.998-05:00You hooked me with "grisly tale" … LOVE...You hooked me with "grisly tale" … LOVED LOVED the whole thing - it should be a movie :) So impressed … The third stanza from the end might be my favorite… Love "When the moon was a witch boat sailing the plains…" but it is closely rivaled with the whole stanza above "The heat lightning flickered…" <br /><br /><br /><br />Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-60332126480639170742014-09-23T13:24:17.010-05:002014-09-23T13:24:17.010-05:00You spin golden words with the skill of Rumplestil...You spin golden words with the skill of Rumplestilskin! Wonderously!Sharon Rawsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17737437259420212462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-85330690562579772712014-09-23T12:22:56.194-05:002014-09-23T12:22:56.194-05:00What a SPECTACULAR poem, a tale told as only you c...What a SPECTACULAR poem, a tale told as only you can tell it. I love the witchboat which sails through this poem, and the dark mood with which the tale is imbued. Fantastic writing, and the sad story it is based on, told below, is as gripping. I, too, of course suspect the husband. Though Fannie's suicide is a question mark. I worry now about the baby daughter, raised by her cruel father, and totally understand why her mother's ghost would haunt the shores of that creek, calling for her. What a tale. What a fantastic write! I am replete, from having read it.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-89644835978672495772014-09-23T12:03:01.358-05:002014-09-23T12:03:01.358-05:00Amazing, beautifully tragic story! I am mesmerize...Amazing, beautifully tragic story! I am mesmerized by your writing! MORE! I want MORE please! I was there, I saw everything, thanks to you.....Weeping Sirenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01020185691919586581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-79263520126625369132014-09-23T11:54:42.496-05:002014-09-23T11:54:42.496-05:00Hedge, let me just applaud and offer you the last ...Hedge, let me just applaud and offer you the last hairs from my head, my broken pencils, and my retirement. Damn.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-51570929273950351402014-09-23T10:21:07.479-05:002014-09-23T10:21:07.479-05:00Stunned amazement!
What a tale, spun by the magic...Stunned amazement!<br /><br />What a tale, spun by the magic hand of the story-teller (in ottava rima no less!). I think the impact lies in the nuances, the recurring moon, the juxtaposition of male and female relationships.. and above all that ghostly presence. This narrative will remain with me - such images are not easily erased.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-81346438094497995002014-09-23T10:01:44.830-05:002014-09-23T10:01:44.830-05:00Oh that totally gave me goosebumps(which I conside...Oh that totally gave me goosebumps(which I consider a good thing). :D XXXGinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08814694362956456055noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-83005099052214271152014-09-23T09:23:51.375-05:002014-09-23T09:23:51.375-05:00Thanks, Magaly--I am really grateful for this chal...Thanks, Magaly--I am really grateful for this challenge, as it was mesmerizing for me, too. I felt as if I was 'in the skin' of those women, and I'm so glad you liked the carnival aspect, which of course, is completely outside the known facts, but which I think adds a lot.<br /><br />@Karin--thanks, and yes, when I first read this story I thought how little has changed for too many women. Katy obviously came from a fairly affluent family, and was well-educated, yet she couldn't escape domestic violence, as prevalent then as it is in the news today.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-27291348500427648692014-09-23T08:47:01.912-05:002014-09-23T08:47:01.912-05:00Agh, so sad. Really well conveyed, and the roll o...Agh, so sad. Really well conveyed, and the roll of the ottava rima underscores the ups and downs of the story, the carnival, the coaches, the swoons--just too sad a story, really--the menace very swiftly and powerfully depicted. Can't write more as need to work, but wonderful, sad tale, Joy, powerfully told. And too topical. k. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-70369404467310470082014-09-23T08:25:47.259-05:002014-09-23T08:25:47.259-05:00My goodness! Typos not "types," lol!My goodness! Typos not "types," lol!Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-61889667318231894262014-09-23T08:25:17.367-05:002014-09-23T08:25:17.367-05:00Um... disregard my types. I'm just overexcited...Um... disregard my types. I'm just overexcited. ;-DMagaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2542041444980449672.post-40583545408536785052014-09-23T08:24:35.047-05:002014-09-23T08:24:35.047-05:00My sweet word-weaving goddesses, Hedgewitch, this ...My sweet word-weaving goddesses, Hedgewitch, this is gloriously fantastic! I love the balanced dance between the lines and between misery and hope...<br /><br />I'm more than taken by the way you've portrayed that carnivalesque feeling, which I love so much. This lines, for instance, left me wanting to dance: <br />"There was Jacko the clown, stringy as a rat,<br />Ma's name and a snake his tattoo valentine,<br />Rudy the barker in a ten dollar hat,<br />talking apple butter, smiling turpentine."<br /><br />Thanks so much for accepting the challenge, and for turning it into this yumminess! ♥ Magaly Guerrerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18295455026184103230noreply@blogger.com