The forms we have been enjoying are all of the Rondeau family, defined by the rentrement. The rentrement, as we saw in the last post's roundel, is an opening phrase or line that becomes a refrain. A French poet of the 19th century, Theodore de Banville, said of the rentrement, "It is at once the subject and its means of expression."
In "The Literary World", published in 1889, Charles Henry Luders gave us this quick lesson in the "Rondelet":
A RONDELETWhile each poem in the rondeau family is derived from a dance round set to music, the rondelet is also a short, disciplined format. There are a mere seven lines. A rondelet composed in French will be syllabic, counting 4-8-4-8-8-8-4. When written in English, the syllable count is often disregarded, and tends to be iambic. You are free to use the strict syllable count or choose another! While the strictness of the French-style meter helps to bring a spare beauty to your verse, a looser English-style meter can give you a little room to play around with this form. However, there must be meter and flow even if you choose a looser interpretation of the rules. "Rondelet", above, hews very close to the French syllable count, but not exactly, and its meter and flow are similar to what we are aiming for, here. Try reading your piece out loud to be sure it doesn't sound choppy.
Is just seven verses rhymed on two.
A rondelet
Is an old jewel quaintly set
In poesy--a drop of dew
Caught in a roseleaf. Lo! For you,
A rondelet.
This format is also rhymed, and the scheme ends up looking like this:
A (Refrain)The first line, our rentrement, becomes the third and the seventh line as well.
B
R
A
B
B
R
A fun way to approach the rondelet is to begin it like a traditional haiku. Pick two clear images and try to reconcile them. Be sure to take your time in selecting the perfect descriptions, and don't settle for something easy or trite. It's not difficult to turn a small piece like this into doggerel. It's like walking a tightrope: you have to find a balance, adhering to the format yet allowing your own voice to shape it. Don't be afraid to modify the strictest rules as needed, while treating them with respect.
I couldn't find any online, readily available versions of the rondelet, none I truly liked, so I don't have an example to post for you in the article. I will of course link up along with runaway sentence. at the bottom when my version is posted, and look forward to reading your versions of this tricky, yet rewarding, little form.
This looks like it will be a lot of fun.. will definitely try to wrap my tired brain around it.
ReplyDeletewhew! i found this challenge very challenging. i think maybe mine turned out to be doggerel :)
ReplyDeletegiving this a go...
ReplyDeletethis is the first time I have tried something like this.of course this doesnt come naturally.just hope its not too bad :)
ReplyDeleteThank you for joining us Abin. As a side note, the link you left us took me to a different poem, but I found your Rondelet on the front page of your blog.
ReplyDeleteAh! yes the link was wrong.anyway, thanks for the comments Kerry and Kim.this was fun!
ReplyDeletehere's the correct link again:
ReplyDeletehttp://abinsliteraryworld.blogspot.com/2011/08/anxiety-creeps.html
I like a challenge...
ReplyDeleteA play with "A Whiter Shade of Pale".
ReplyDeleteI had fun gardening today, except...
ReplyDeletehttp://lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com/2011/08/who-is-she.html/
Oh man. I'm challenged and I came up with the idea in the first place. Ouch, my dignity!
ReplyDeleteLove that there are so many responses to this one!!
Hm ... I thought that I had left a comment yesterday. Well after much hard work ... I have turned out a rondelet that I hope pretty much keeps to the count and rhyme but OH MY ... it is doggerel. Silly but I had to initially do this with the poems of others in my view, until that really confused me. Thank you for this opportunity.
ReplyDeleteOk so I think I wrote a rondelet but then I think I wrote a doggerel. I too opened up a poem and the directions here and went from there. The poem I opeend to use as an example was Marian's but she syas hers was a doggerel lol. So I wrote something...you tell me waht it was lol. I am off to visit the others.
ReplyDeleteThis was tough, but I needed to push myself~ Great exercise Grace!
ReplyDeletetwo observations. first, i love that Grace has us referring to our crappy poems as doggerel, it's so much more dignified than saying crap. and also? NOW we can find plenty of interesting rondelets on the internet! rondelet, rondelet!
ReplyDeleteThe funny thing is, I real Old Raven's, quickly penned mine down, went into read Robb's and he and I both wrote on the same topic.......too funny. Great minds, and all that......(or not-so-great, in my case!)
ReplyDeleteThere's nothing wrong with doggerel - it usually makes me laugh, and that can't be bad.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed this exercise very much, though the result is nothing to write home about!
Kim, I tried three times to comment on your lovely, lovely poem, but couldn't make the comment stick. I said something like "probably the closest to the original French form."
ReplyDeleteI dusted off my rusty French skills (and my dictionary) for the second attempt. I hope it's not completely screwed up... :)
ReplyDeleteWe all had such a lot of fun with this challenge. Thanks Grace, Can't wait to see what we will have to pit our wits against next time.
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