A Mini-Challenge for Sunday

Dance the night away...

'The Singing Butler' by Jack Vettriano

It was Lillian Susan Thomas who introduced me to the Waltz Wave Form several years ago.  She explained it to me thus:

 

As for the Waltz Wave Form, it's easier than haiku because it relies only on a syllable count without all the other requirements: 
The longest line has 4 syllables, for a total of 19 lines and 38 syllables. Each line is composed of the following syllable counts in succession:

 
1,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,3,4,3,2,1,2,3,2,1,2,1

She also offered this advice:

It works best with 1 -2 syllable words; use a thesaurus to find a short equivalent for the word you want to use. (We all get brain freeze occasionally.) If yellow won't fit, try gold, or bronze, or eliminate an adjective. 
And the other hint is you start recasting your sentence when it doesn't work.  When you find you are stuck, it is probably because you have fallen in love with one way of saying it. When you like the way some phrase sounds and can't turn it around or inside out, let go of the first phrasing to find a better one. 

Lillian kindly allowed me to use her work as an example, and you can read another on her blog, From the Heart's Garden, if you click HERE

*Fall Leaves Fly (A Waltz Wave)

Fall 
leaves fly 
past 
the bus 
moving through 
traffic. 
A 
child's face 
pressed against 
the window looks 
out at folks, 
standing 
at 
bus stops, 
walking on 
the streets 
all 
a blur - 
gone.


Lillian Susan Thomas

This link remains open all week for anyone who would like to post a poem later than Sunday.