Sunday, April 21, 2013

The Sunday Mini-Challenge : Lune

Hello to all the Toads and Pond Dwellers!   

On April 25, 2013 at 21:57, we will see a full moon.   So, I think it is timely that the poetry form we tackle today is called Lune, which is French for “moon.  In mathematics, the lune is a shape that is similar to a crescent moon.

© picture by MamaZen

This 3-line poem has been called the American haiku and has two variations:   

Robert Kelly, an American poet,  invented the Lune poetry form.  He felt that adhering to the strict form of Japanese haiku (5-7-5 syllables) in English creates a different poem than the Japanese intention. He invented the Lune to remove these differences, and the only requirement is the 5-3-5 syllables. There are no other rules i.e. no need for a cutting word or punctuation.    Rhymes are fine; subject matter is wide open. 

In his book, Lunes, Robert Kelly has a short foreward:

Lunes are small poems that spend half their lives in darkness & half in light.  Each lune has thirteen syllables one for each month of the moons year. 

a minute ago
that tree was
still full of blackbirds


is this form too short
love alone
makes do with less

Jack Collom created his version by accident.  He was, "beginning to work with schoolchildren when he misremembered Kelly's idea as a count of 3/5/3 words, rather than syllables." In doing so, he created a new variation of the Lune. As a happy coincidence, this variation made it easier for kids to create Lunes, since words are easier to count than syllables.

Here is one from Kim Nelson:

Tucson's winter moon
peaks down at desert life
chilling deepest night

In writing the lune poem, be guided that the intention is to make the minimal reverberate to the maximum.  Each lune is a separate poem.

So, our challenge today is to write a new lune poem either using the following:
Kelly Lune -Three lines containing a syllabic count of 5-3-5 (thirteen syllables).
Collom Lune -Three lines containing a word count of 3-5-3 (eleven words).

This can be a single lune or a series of interlocking lunes.  

I look forward to your words.   Happy Sunday to all ~ 

Grace (aka Heaven)


Kay L. Davies said...

This sounds like fun, Grace!
Lots of puns upcoming for "claire de lune" perhaps? I will try not to be one of the punsters, but I can't promise.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love this challenge, Heaven. I will back later - we're taking my eldest daughter back to college after her short break, this morning.

Susie Clevenger said...

What a lovely challenge Grace. Happy Sunday everyone!

Janine Bollée said...

Nice new snappy forms. Thank you and have a pleasant warm[ish] sunday.

Scarlet said...

Kay, Kerry, I can't wait for your lunes.

I noticed though that the second Kelly lune is lacking a word on the third line. Since the article is linked, I am taking the liberty to amend the form here:

is this form too short
love alone
makes do with much less

Happy Sunday to all ~


hedgewitch said...

This is going short with a vengeance, Heaven. (Please forgive me if I still call you that--if you hate it let me know) and I'm the one who thinks 55 words is an ordeal by fire. But will see what I can do

Scarlet said...


You can write a series of lune poems ~ Smiles ~

Susan said...

This was fun, Grace, and very challenging. Fortunately it is Sunday morning which has its own peculiarities around Philadelphia and other places I have lived. Go faithful!

Scarlet said...

Susan, it happens around here too ~ Smiles ~

Mary said...

I enjoyed your challenge, Grace! Happy Sunday to everyone.

Marian said...

we could go all day with these, huh? maybe i will!

Ella said...

Lunes I am feeling looney!

Thanks Grace :D

I hope to catch up for the past couple of days!
Our internet was on and off all day yesterday?!

Happy Sunday Toads!

Scarlet said...

Marian, you can write lunes for the rest of the month, ha ~

Ella, I look forward to your looney lunes ~ Smiles ~

I am enjoying the wonderful share so far ~ I will be back in the afternoon after doing some errands ~

Ellecee said...

Thank you for this challenge Grace,,I like the shorter forms. I think what you say is correct most of my Haiku have been Lunes :-)

LLM Calling said...

what a great new form, it's worked so well for writing about the church work I've done with the kids this morning, a lot of playing on words as well :)

Charleen said...

Thanks for the opportunity to post today. Today my writing is quite serious- focusing on something that really weighs me down.

Ella said...

I want to write another one ;D
Thank you Grace!

Margaret said...

I have had a non stop weekend and if I don't get the weekend prompts done today I will hope to link them Monday. Thanks. I like this challenge as it is a new (short) for. Horray

Anonymous said...

Grace, I hope you will excuse the funny one about my cat barfing, but it just... came out... er, you know.

The last one is a true story, another aspect of my relationship with my mom, gone 21 years this month.

Thanks for a lovely prompt, Grace. Sunday is a work day for pastors and their spouses, so I got to posting a bit late! Amy

L. Edgar Otto said...

Hi, I wrote a moon centered poem but not sure how to send it... it is also on face book and my pesla.blogspot com I have some trouble with the formating it should be 9 lines more or less the same length ... it covers agoraphobia among other things in our virtual world and human relations

BTW I think there are better forms of haiku closer to the Japanese model in how they measure or count syllables than those presented.


Scarlet said...

Ellecee, thanks for playing along. Lune poems are simpler than haiku.

Emma, happy to see that you like the short form ~

Charleen, your lunes break my heart, goodness ~

Ella, you can write lunes for the rest of the week, ha ~

Margaret, I will check it out on Monday ~

Amy, I enjoyed your various take on the lunes ~

Scarlet said...

PeSla, please enter the specific post link in our Mr. Linky if you want to play along ~ Otherwise, we wouldn't know where to find your poem ~ Please note that this challenge form is very specific, a lune poem ~

Loredana, your lune poem is lovely dear ~

Thanks everyone for participating ~

Peggy said...

These were fun forms for me Grace. I am so happy when I find one I feel I can actually do. Mine both turned out to be serious but still I enjoyed writing them.

Scarlet said...

Peggy, I think you may have to enter the correct link again ~ Thanks for playing along ~

Susan said...

Peggy, Your site locked me out. Please check its settings!

Hannah said...

Hi!! This is great! I'll have a post tomorrow to rough and late to night...look forward to reading you guys. :)

Anonymous said...

Grace ~ have been meaning to ask for ages ~ does 'Imaginary Gardens With Real Toads' allude to Marianne Moore? ~ it's a genius title :)

Grace said...

Polly - Yes it does ~

Good to see you here ~

Carol Steel said...

That was a fun challenge. Thank you Grace. I am posting my lunes on this day of the full moon. I hope it's not too late.

Carol Steel said...

That was a fun challenge. Thank you Grace. I am posting my lunes on this day of the full moon. I hope it's not too late.