Definition

One must make a distinction however: when dragged into prominence by half poets, the result is not poetry, nor till the autocrats among us can be “literalists of the imagination”—above insolence and triviality and can present for inspection, imaginary gardens with real toads in them, shall we have it.

Saturday, October 12, 2013

The Sunday Mini-challenge: Loop poetry

Hello to all the pond dwellers and visitors ~ For this weekend challenge, we are going to try our hand in writing loop poetry.

 Street Art, Ottawa City by Grace

This poetry form was created by Hellon. There are no restrictions on the number of stanzas nor on the syllable count for each line. In each stanza, the last word of the first line becomes the first word of line two, last word of line 2 becomes the first word of line 3, last word of line 3 becomes the first word of line 4. This is followed for each stanza. The rhyme scheme is abcb.

Example (the rhyme scheme is in bold print):  

How I See You

Eyes that don't see
see the things that you do
do you wish me to describe
describe how I see you.

Skin so delicate
delicate as a rose
rose that will blossom
blossom as it grows.

Hair moving gently
gently you tease
tease...softly whispering
whispering summer breeze. 
 
(In part) Copyright © 2009 Hellon
 
Variations:

1. Written in stanzas or one long stanza, there is no rhyming.   However the last word, first word scheme is maintained.

Example:

Bloody eyes

Bloody eyes..watching..waiting
waiting in gloomy shadows
shadows of night
night so...still
still they watch, still they wait
wait for you
you..the next victim
victim of evil
evil that lurks
lurks in silence
silence then...screams
screams...then silence
silence of night
night of shadows
shadows of gloom..waiting
waiting...watching
watching..bloody eyes

Copyright © 2009 Hellon

2. Couplets mixed with 4 line stanzas.   The last word, first word scheme is maintained in the stanzas. It can also be used in the couplets. Rhyme scheme is ab, cc, defg, hh, ii, jklm, nn, oo.

Example (Only the stanzas below follow the last word, first word scheme) :


Picture Frame

Looking out at the world from a picture frame
smile frozen in time.. skin of porcelain

Eyes of green meadows on a warm summer's day
auburn hair falling cascades to disarray...

disarray like her life
life changed this young girl
girl with a past
past life..secrets hidden

around the frame wallpaper is faded
just like her life, over...jaded

smile frozen in time behind emerald eyes
there in a past entwined with lies

Lies...there were many
many secrets..haunting
haunting her now
now re-living the nightmare

Fear of a night she would rather forget
so long ago still she lives with regret

picture frame now smashed, shattered glass on the floor
just like her life, dreams are no more.

Copyright © 2009 Hellon 


For Sunday's challenge, please write a new loop poem using any of the variations above.  

The Sunday Challenge is posted on Saturday at noon CST to allow extra time for the form challenge. We stipulate that only poems written for this challenge may be added to the Mr Linky.  Management reserves the right to remove unrelated links, but invites you to share a poem of your choice on Open Link Monday.

I look forward to reading your words ~  Grace (aka Heaven)


27 comments:

Ella said...

Oh, Grace I love this form! What a great challenge~ :D

Happy weekend Toads

Grace said...

Thank you Ella ~ This is fun to do and perfect for our long weekend ~ Happy weekend to you and everyone ~

juzta mom said...

Ella thank you so much for a wonderful challenge. I have been lazy about writing since few days..this was too tempting to not write. I loved writing on it :)

And Happy Weekend to all :)

juzta mom said...

Sigh..Sorry I meant Grace :(

Kathryn said...

Not as easy as it looks. :0)

Grace said...

Juzta mom, no worries ~

Kathryn, its a bit tricky ~ I think you have to choose words that have more than one meaning ~

Robert Bourne said...

oh boy this one could be a challenge..I do things off the cuff... I will see if I can do this...from failure comes learning.... :)

Robert Bourne said...

this was a bit out of my comfort zone... I don't usually stick to a structure.. but I gave it a try... :)

Kay L. Davies said...

Lovely form, Grace. Looking forward to trying it as soon as I decide which example I like best. Unlike Robert Bourne, I love form challenges. They give me a frame in which to work.
K

Grace said...

Robert, hope it was fun though, smiles ~

Kay, looking forward to yours ~

Pranavam Ravikumar a.k.a. Kochuravi said...

Wonderful! Bit difficukt as far as I am concerned!

Thanks and wishes!

Loredana Donovan said...

So much fun, Grace! Love it! Thank you for introducing us to this lovely form. I learned something new. :)

Susan said...

I'll be back to read and to rewrite. I really like looping, maybe as much as others like knitting. My content is weak today, but I will put more real toads in before I'm finished with it.

Shruthy Haridas said...

This is being an interesting challenge.I actually wonder how come a loop poetry in the master brains,really amazing idea.It's peculiar sort of rhyming is also lovely.Thank you for bringing such a challenge.I have made a try, don't know if it is up to the rule.Happy weekend :)

Hannah said...

Thank you, Grace!! I love loop-y poems! ;)

I'll be back to read...I have kind of a big morning, speaking/reading a work of mine in public...wish me luck!

Grace said...

Good morning everyone ~

I will be around to read yours in a bit ~

Vandana ~ You have linked up an old poem so I will be removing it ~ Can you please write a new one as the challenge calls for a new one ~ Thanks dear ~

Marian said...

this is very, very hard. argh!

Fireblossom said...

Those examples are just chock full of tired phrasing. Bad poetry written in form is still bad poetry.

Ella said...

I struggled, but was reminded of my daughter and her band! I like how it came out...thank you Grace!

Margaret said...

Thank you for this challenge! I am off to the horse barn, but will settle in later tonight and visit everyone.

Grace said...

Thanks so much for the lovely responses ~ I will be checking tomorrow for anyone still trying out this form ~

Have a good night everyone ~

Loredana Donovan said...

In response to Shay's comment: I like the examples that Grace gave us. They seem simple, but the form is actually complex. They were easy to understand precisely because of their simplicity. When learning a new form, it helps me to use simple phrasing at first, and then with practice, I can push myself for more sophisticated wording. Poetry takes lots of practice! I'm glad I gave it a try. Thanks again, Grace :)

Grace said...

Loredana ~ Thank you for the lovely response ~ Simple but not easy to do, I found out too ~ I happy with the responses of everyone ~ We are not always successful with the first attempt but with practice we can certainly become more & more skillful with the form ~

Happy week ahead ~

Akila G said...

In so late. but will try this nevertheless! have been little busy. thank you Grace!

Mama Zen said...

I just got mine finished (this is tough!). I linked to Open Link.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Karin, the poem you linked here takes us to an older post. If you wrote a looping poem, please link up again.

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