Definition

One must make a distinction however: when dragged into prominence by half poets, the result is not poetry, nor till the autocrats among us can be “literalists of the imagination”—above insolence and triviality and can present for inspection, imaginary gardens with real toads in them, shall we have it.

Saturday, December 21, 2013

When I Write Tanka (Part 1) ~ Hisashi Nakamura

For the past few months, Dr Hisashi Nakamura has been sharing his "Thoughts on Tanka" with the poets of The Imaginary Garden. Follow these links to Part 1Part 2 and Part 3. In this and next months feature, Dr Nakamura will shares his insights into writing tanka successfully in English.





1 31 English Syllables


I use 31 English syllables when I write tanka knowing that the great majority of people writing tanka in the world are against the idea of keeping the Japanese form when writing in English. I do not try to argue over the number of syllables to be used or that there should be any specific form for writing tanka in English. I simply stick to two points. Firstly, I think poetry requires discipline. Secondly, the 31 syllables divided into the units of 5/7/5/7/7 can create a poem whether or not it is an “English tanka”!

2 The Perspective of the Classical Tanka Realm 


After studying several thousands of classical tanka and struggling to translate some of them into English, I unconsciously see things around me from the perspective of the classical tanka realm. Wherever I go - the Yorkshire moors, the northeast coast, declined industrial cities and ports, London, Paris, Amsterdam, Elsinore or Prague - I am in the shadow of the aesthetic of classical tanka. As I cannot escape from this shadow I tend to frame what I see from the perspective of the classics.

The September sun 
Hidden in the milky dawn 
Now shows a pale disc. 
A huddle of sheep shadows 
Looms out of the pearly mist.



3 Nature and Real Experience 


I write tanka when I am moved by something while I am rambling in the countryside. I do not try to compose new tanka at home although I may spend some time to revise the original composition.

The silent forest 
Is whitened in the spring dusk 
By the passing rain. 
Sifted through the fresh needles 
Breezes pass through the larch trees.

4 Upper Poem and Lower Poem 


A tanka usually consists of an upper poem and a lower poem which interact to create suggestiveness. The interaction of the upper and the lower in the following should create not only two images about a skylark and a lamb but also a feeling of ungrounded fear about my own existence in a peaceful environment.

Over the June moors 
A skylark is sucked into 
The wide timeless sky. 
From the edge of blue stillness, 
The faint bleating of a lamb.




The challenge today is to write tanka from the perspective of your observations of your own immediate surroundings. Attempt to look at your subject within the frame of tanka poetry and translate what you see into writing. Draw your themes from the natural world and your real experience of it and try to create that tension between the upper and lower poem, always conscious of the words expressed, and the thoughts suggested beyond the lines themselves.  

You may write as many tanka as you feel inspired to do. Multiple links are welcome, or you may prefer to have a series of tanka in one post. Please provide a link back to this site, as a way of acknowledging Dr Nakamura's input. 

All tanka featured in this post are © Hisashi Nakamura 2013 and used with permission.


Bonsai photo credit: cliff1066™ via photopin cc
Winter Pagoda photo credit: EugeniusD80 via photopin cc
Lantern Path photo credit: Stuck in Customs via photopin cc



10 comments:

Robert Bourne said...

this will be quite a challenge... :)

Grace said...

Thanks for the lovely and continuing series on tanka Kerry ~ A challenge, I agree ~

Happy weekend to all ~

Marian said...

bending the rules and linking up a tanka i wrote earlier this week... and you KNOW i will write & link more. i just love this series, Kerry! sooo appreciate.

Susie Clevenger said...

I so enjoy this series Kelly. Thanks for all you do to present it to us.

restraintunfettered.com said...

Hi, my first time visiting your site. I followed a link on my Twitter stream and found you. I love tanka. I couldn't resist the challenge. I look forward to getting to know everyone.

Loredana Donovan said...

Welcome back, Kerry, and thank you both for another tanka challenge. I'm really enjoying this series.

Happy Holidays to everyone in the garden :)

Ella said...

I love this form!
Thank you, For sharing the upper n lower forms. Off to gather moss and see beyond the ordinary.

grapeling said...

some beautiful photos, Kerry. Happy week, all ~

Hannah said...

I usually don't try to play catch up when I've fallen behind but I couldn't miss out on this. What a treat. Thank you Kerry and thank you so much to Dr. Nakamura for his insights. :)

Susan said...

Finally. I like reading Tanka, and the explanations from Hisashi Nakamura taught me more than I knew and more than I incorporate. I enjoyed this, Kerry.